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Summer Symphony by ~evil-dwarf:iconevil-dwarf:





Blue ecstasy seared a gap
In the quivering sky;
A composed line of the symphony,
Scribbled with an eccentric hand.

The symphony began…

Wind rushed against
The face of the earth
Through the space between trees
And the cracks between buildings,
These narrows and wides
Spread, allowing the storm
To breathe through its veins
As blood does rush through mine.

The rhythmic pulse now audible…

Each tree
Writhed and heaved
In violent seduction;
Bent and bowed in submission
To the sultry heavens,
The mass glimmering
With each swell
Of its small, forest sea.

The land began to throb…

Somewhere between
The sky and ground
A climatic burst
Shot forth as sound,
An echoed music
To surround
The trembling earth…
…Exploding,
Erupting
Within me.
My chin arrowed and
Spine curved towards
The ashing clouds,
Palms up,
Wet with their
Perspiration…
I stood
Enthralled.
©2006-2009 ~evil-dwarf
:iconevil-dwarf:

Author's Comments

hm, decided not to rhyme this time (with the exception in the 4th stanza). This was written for my creative writing class and I haven't decided if I like it yet^_^.

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:iconjay-bug:
Woah, talk about epic Anna. Amazing flow, great imagery, easily felt emotion. This is a grade a poem ma'am, wonderful job.

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Move like a child
Think like a guru
Love like a god
:iconclearwater1291:
this is so beautiful-there's great imagery.
I love thunderstorms-they do seem a lot like a symphony. Wonderful poem :)

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just beyond the edge of the perfectly normal lies the truly bizarre
:iconsingularity-of-verse:
Not to sound like everyone else, but the imagery is excellent in this poem. I like your personification of the storm with the idea of veins. I especially enjoyed the stanza with "violent seduction." The adjectives you used here are almost the pinnacle of the poem (at least they were for me). I would love for you to take a look at a my gallery and critique some of my poetry.

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"The most incomprehensible thing about the universe is that it is comprehensible." ~Albert Einstein

So, pretty much, the fact that we know stuff means it's all probably wrong. ^-^
:iconevil-dwarf:
Wow, thank you so much. I would love to look at your poetry, thank you for offering^-^.

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Speak Softly
People Will Listen
Take Your Time
The World Will Wait
:iconevil-dwarf:
I appreciate your comment Jay...they are always so uplifting, thankies:heart::heart:

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Speak Softly
People Will Listen
Take Your Time
The World Will Wait
:iconevil-dwarf:
Thank you! I love to just stand outside in the middle of a thunderstorm...especially summer ones^-^.

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Speak Softly
People Will Listen
Take Your Time
The World Will Wait
:iconsingularity-of-verse:
Seriously. ^_~
Check out the gallery any time. Your input would be much appreciated.

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"The most incomprehensible thing about the universe is that it is comprehensible." ~Albert Einstein

So, pretty much, the fact that we know stuff means it's all probably wrong. ^-^
:iconevil-dwarf:
Yup. I left you a comment on your main page. Hopefully you got it^-^. Thanks for commenting on my poetry!

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Speak Softly
People Will Listen
Take Your Time
The World Will Wait
:iconsingularity-of-verse:
I did... it was so nice of you!

You're welcome; any time. :nod:

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"The most incomprehensible thing about the universe is that it is comprehensible." ~Albert Einstein

So, pretty much, the fact that we know stuff means it's all probably wrong. ^-^

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