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                                       Watch the small, fragile body.
                          Watch the frozen stillness of intoxicating slumber.
                      Thick silhouette breathes against the window square.
                   The brown sky was midnight, and midnight was summer.
                                             Content is gold lights.
                      Content shimmers through the brilliant fog of dreams.
                                                     A soft hush.
                                                      Innocent.
                                            Everything was warm.
                                            Everything was silent.


                                      Watch the small, fragile body.
                                                       Defiant.
                                                      Unaware.
                                     Bare feet were pink and smooth,
                                 pressed against the opposing ground.
                                A sponge of the sun, it hums with heat.
                                                 Run, slender legs,
                                          along the slice of a breeze,
                                          away from things to come.
                                            Everything was natural.
                                              Everything was pure.


                                     Watch the small, fragile body.


                                                  Watch it fade.


                                              Watch current eyes,
                                                worn and weak,
                                   ache for sleep that never satisfies.
                                 Tormented by hope that reeks deceit.
                                  Passion continues to draw into itself.
                                        Hope whispers it will unfold...
                                                   nothing is rich
                                                           and
                                                   nothing is real.
©2007-2009 ~evil-dwarf
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Author's Comments

Hm, of course, not sure yet whether I like it or not. I've found that narratives, or descriptive essays are my stronger point in writing.

I kind of tried a different writing style this time...one that is very vague, with random, but specific aspects, and "choppy" statements.

I'll cut through some of the vagueness by saying that the topic assigned in my creative writing class for this poem was childhood.

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:iconkazuto-kun:
"Just about" to put something up, huh? :poke: Hehe, I'm teasing. Anyway...

This really does make me think of childhood, especially the end part. It seems like things were a lot more "wonderful" during childhood, but then, that wonder goes away when you get older... :hmm: Good job on this poem, it really makes a person think.

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Thanks Adam.

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